May 6, 2009

PeAcE!!

I sit calmly
Gazing at the sea
The setting sun
The oozing serenity!


The waves caressing the sand
How could he ever let go of my hand
The tears I have in my eyes
Can never tell you my plight!

The waves roll out again
Like the pain in me time and again
They return dauntlessly
And I look at the sky complainingly!

The sun is setting
Indicating the dawn
Just the way he left me
To cry and to frown!

I am not weak
I know my might
I grow stronger
With each passing night!

The dawn brings with it
Rays of hope
For the puppets of the God
Who hold on to their rope!

Life is never the same
You can never live it with ease
I promise today
I will find that PEACE!

P.S.: I am so new to poetry, please bear with me!

30 comments:

  1. thank you for the last lines.. :D Aarthi, now you are not new..you are old in poetry..:)

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  2. @ Kajal,

    New or old...I don't know!

    I can just say...I'm growing each day! :)

    Cheers

    *PEACE*

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  3. athu thaan di.. you are 'growing' old.. :P

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  4. nice one aarti./... :).. Liked it... :)

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  5. Very peacefull - this "peace" of wriing :)

    Loved it!!

    I keep loving so may posts here, I will have to change my definition of Love soon ;)

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  6. @ Zendagi,

    Thank you!

    And yes, this place (WL) teaches you a lot!

    Keep loving!

    Cheers
    *PEACE*

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  7. i read this already thrice! its sooo beautiful Artz! :)

    and your words don't say that u are new to poetry! its like u have been writing all this while! :)

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  8. beautiful....every post is new topoetry.....every thought written is new and fresh...!!!

    so dear, dont think it at all coz we are all new...!!

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  9. @ Leo,

    Heheheh! You just make me smile with ever comment of yours!

    Cheers

    *PEACE*

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  10. @ Yamini,

    Very well said dearie... :)

    Thanks!

    Cheers

    *PEACE*

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  11. Insha allah u definitely will:)
    poignant stuff!!!

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  12. but your a poet at heart I can see!

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  13. No words for this!

    I am taking it down as a safe note.
    Would preserve it in my poetry collection.
    :)

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  14. @ Comfortably Numb,

    Thanks a lot! :)

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  15. @ Pisku,

    At heart I always was, but never tried writing!
    :)

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  16. @ Mohita,

    Thank you girl! You can surely take it down! Glad that you liked it so much! :)

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  17. that's very good aarthi
    who said you are new
    this poem shows you are very matured in the poetry field

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  18. @ Chirag,

    Sab aisa hi keh rahe hain, par mujhse poocho meri khushi! Its just like the way a small kid becomes so happy when he learns something new!

    Wow! Its so unbelievable for me!

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  19. beautiful! likd it! keep writing! :)

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  20. This is refreshing.
    Try not to force a rhyme scheme.
    For ex, 'And I look at the sky complainingly!' doesn't quite fit in. But the imagery invoked is a pleasant one:)

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  21. @ Kish,

    It was not a forceful attempt...to make it rhyme. But it felt that way, i'll take care of it next time :)

    Thanks! Finally I got someone who threw light on the mistake I made! Glad!

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  22. u bein modest...???
    the poem is lovely...loved the fifth segment of it...simple n cute...

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  23. @ Arun,

    Modest...nope re! And thanks for dropping by! :)

    Cheers

    *PEACE*

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  24. @arun,
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    dont believe Artz..
    she is really being modest only! :D

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