May 11, 2009

Together Forever...

So my first tryst with the mush. I wrote it few months back, dont know if it is worth reading.

Together Forever… Walking together.
Loving each other so effortlessly.
Sharing and Caring, we’re closest of friends.
Always together - Our love never ends.

Together, Forever - Our hearts are so true.
Together, Forever - Just me and you.
Together, Forever - Let love have its way.
Together, Forever - We’re happy each day!


Till the next time,
Rose

P.S I cross posted it from my site other than blogger. I know I cant write about this one feeling, very bad at it, sorry if it was bad :D

19 comments:

  1. firstly.. no soory accepted here .. every rite deserves a reading and appreciation for its good :) this was simple, sweet and heartfelt :)

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  2. now if you dnt mind, i just wanted to point that except first two lines, rest lines rhymed .. its not a compulsion fr all lines to rhyme .. but just that its breaks the pattern here!! a lovely poem indeed .. sorry if u dint like this comment .. i will remove it after ur reply

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  3. lol!
    i didnt mind at all...jus commented on ur sonnet post...i cant rite with rhymes...breaks my flow :D
    n I'm here to learn...so no sorry accepted as well:D
    thanks a ton:)
    n thanks for appreciatin, it was very sweet of you :)

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  5. good to see that ! i was afraid you might not like it once i commented .. :)

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  6. arre na re...critics are the best admirer,atleast in this case:) :)

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  7. Lovely poem. Ya like prats said first two didnt rhyme but others did. I liked it though

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  8. oho...kya ho raha yaha??? btw saw ur commennt nw??? so hu yu asking??

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  9. arre...I'm asking you, who else..my family is very limited here you see:)
    N you were supposed to comment about my tryst with mush here !

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  10. oh yea...lol...i would say you are beginning to be mushy...lol...stay in TWL or take advices from me...and voila...lol

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  11. AHH ROSE....

    dnt u knw our W L rules......no crossposting stuffs girlie....crossposting,reposting n all during weekends.....

    abt poem...

    no words...beautiful...its worth reading

    do read those 4 wl rules... .okie


    smiles

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  12. Lovely poem...
    You say u r bad in writing about this feeling...
    u must've seen my pathetic attempts...they are stored as drafts in my blog...never intend to post em too...

    compared to mine ...ur poem is 1000 times better...
    Ciao..

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  13. Hey Rose,

    That was sweet and simple.. Keep writing

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  14. @arun
    aaawww...that was sweet...but i never compre any writes...every writer writes with a heart...all you neeed is a heart to understand:)
    thanks buddy...but do post your attempts, you've got readers here, waiting:)

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  15. you know what? After some tuning and editing here and there.. this could be sung.. :)

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  16. Ya, we'll surely try!
    This is what my band needed :D

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