April 28, 2009

Forever Yours


"I am sorry, I cannot give you what you deserve", she said tears falling down her cheek. He shrugged and moved closer to her....."Then let me at least give you what I have, it will be enough for both of us.....trust me", he said wiping away the tears of pain and feelings of disconcert.

P.S. 1st attempt @ 55 fiction, hope it's not very bad.

11 comments:

  1. its not bad at all !!! its just perfect :) wish it happens in real :)

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  2. i can never resist getting inspired from good replies .. so wrote something .. hope you dnt mind :)

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  3. this leaves a lot of stuff for readers' imagination.. that's why I loved it! :D

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  4. @Pretty Me
    thnx for the appreciation...sometimes it does happen in real too, u just have 2 be lucky enough:)

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  5. @Pretty Me
    why would I ever mind:)
    u r more than welcome!!!

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  6. @Kajal
    so what did the reader in u imagine after reading this:D

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  7. even i would like to know kajal's imagination :)

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  8. bad?? who will ever dare to tell that?? lemme know....its beautiful...!!!

    keep writing..!!!

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  9. my interpretation was the obvious one that this girl is either out of love for him, or is in love with someone else, or is unsure about her feelings, or is suffering from some fatal disease which could harm him too.. etc etc..

    i am sorry if i spoilt the flow..
    :( but these are just some of the few interpretations possible..

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  10. some of the many interpretations i could think of..

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