May 13, 2009

Wasted feelings


U stand before me with a bunch of carnation flowers.......
U look beautiful in the black dress of urs......
I can see u crying......
I come closer to embrace u......
But am not able to feel touch.....
How can I wen am dead????
I Would have been alive if this had happened 2 days back!!!!!!

My first attempt at 55 fiction.......
Forgive me if its horrible.....
Am really not tat good at writing.......

11 comments:

  1. did not get the last line ... rest looked good

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  2. Hey,

    Yes, agree with Prats, can you help figure out the last line? There seems to be a hidden/ under riding tone to it...

    Well, today seems to be 55 fiction. Me too tried it for the first time today.. So we are all sailing in the same boat.. :D

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  3. i think I got that?
    are you tryin' to say the boy wouldn't have been dead, if the girl would have been with him 2 days before when he needed her most...or may be he told her that he loves her and she didnt reciprocate??
    wild guess:P

    otherwise good:)

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  4. Guys I am a newbie writer, can someone please tell me what55 fiction is supposed to be?

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  5. @Rose
    U r rt Rose...... The guy would've been alive if the gal has accepted his love before 2 days......

    @pretty me
    It's my first attempt so don't mind it if ter is any mistake in it.....

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  6. @Kunwar:
    Dude a 55 fivtion is a fictional story in just 55 words.....

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  7. @Zendagi Migzara....
    Thanks for the comment..... Hope u got the meaning now......

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  8. Good one da...goin with tragedies a lot it seems...

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  9. Summa da..... Tragedies r easy to think off.....

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  10. this was bang on!! chance illai!! :D

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  11. @The Pink Orchid
    Thanx for the compliment.....
    It was very sweet of u....

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