U stand before me with a bunch of carnation flowers.......
U look beautiful in the black dress of urs......
I can see u crying......
I come closer to embrace u......
But am not able to feel touch.....
How can I wen am dead????
I Would have been alive if this had happened 2 days back!!!!!!
My first attempt at 55 fiction.......
Forgive me if its horrible.....
Am really not tat good at writing.......
did not get the last line ... rest looked good
ReplyDeleteHey,
ReplyDeleteYes, agree with Prats, can you help figure out the last line? There seems to be a hidden/ under riding tone to it...
Well, today seems to be 55 fiction. Me too tried it for the first time today.. So we are all sailing in the same boat.. :D
i think I got that?
ReplyDeleteare you tryin' to say the boy wouldn't have been dead, if the girl would have been with him 2 days before when he needed her most...or may be he told her that he loves her and she didnt reciprocate??
wild guess:P
otherwise good:)
Guys I am a newbie writer, can someone please tell me what55 fiction is supposed to be?
ReplyDelete@Rose
ReplyDeleteU r rt Rose...... The guy would've been alive if the gal has accepted his love before 2 days......
@pretty me
It's my first attempt so don't mind it if ter is any mistake in it.....
@Kunwar:
ReplyDeleteDude a 55 fivtion is a fictional story in just 55 words.....
@Zendagi Migzara....
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment..... Hope u got the meaning now......
Good one da...goin with tragedies a lot it seems...
ReplyDeleteSumma da..... Tragedies r easy to think off.....
ReplyDeletethis was bang on!! chance illai!! :D
ReplyDelete@The Pink Orchid
ReplyDeleteThanx for the compliment.....
It was very sweet of u....