May 20, 2009

Vain needs

As posted here, here is my attempt at Bit Sonnet

who
must
you
lust?

Who
not
you
got?

vain
needs
pain
breeds.

Why
try?

26 comments:

  1. Interesting! I haven't really read anything like this before..good to read unique stuff!

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  2. good one ...vain needs n pain breeds...nice...
    but...didnt like the second para ....limited by syllable count...???

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  3. thanks BS ! i just like experimenting ... good if its liked too ;)

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  4. thanks Arun !! n yes ,, the syllable needs to be 1 per sentence here !!

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  5. Interesting....first time I'm seeing this format

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  6. 1 syllable and so much of intensity and depth in expression. Prats rules!

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  7. Prats....good attempt dear...but you can still do better..!!!

    good wishes..!!!

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  8. @Poshin : thanks !!


    @Pinkie.. u r too much !!

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  9. oh...so this is how bit sonnet should be...great yaa!
    will try this next :)
    very meaningful and touching:)

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  10. I knew it should be Prats would have written this the moment i read it... :)

    As kajal said.. U rule... this was yet another good one.. :)

    Cheers..!!
    Arjun

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  11. aah its a tuff style !! yes pratsie..You rule :)

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  12. so very kind of you to say that Kumar !!

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  13. thanks rose dear !! do try !! good luck :)

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  14. Hey Prats,

    As I always maintain Talent comes in all sizes.. This happens to be the bonzai, isn't it? :D

    P.S: I want to first read what the different styles are before I can attempt. God knows when time will permit...

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  15. this is superb...not only is the thought brilliant but to expires it in this format...kudos Prats

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  16. and i always say, u over praise me Arjun :P

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  17. u do check all styles dearie !! hope u love some of them !!

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  18. Now thts UNIQUELY PRATS..

    Very intersting..:)
    cheers...

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  19. uff prats uff :)

    but very hopeless!!

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  20. thankuuu charu :)


    @Asbah : hopeless as in ??

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