March 12, 2009

Choodiyan aur Rishte



“Chand choodiyon ke intezaar me
Paagal roye rehti hai
Hasti khelti thi pehle
Jane kyun ab khoyi rehti hai

Har subah sadak pe
Sooraj ki laali jab chaati hai
Nange pawn wahan ye
Khoyi si Daudi jaati hai

Sheher ke simt tikaye nazren
Jaane Kisko khoja karti hai
Har aati bus se utarte logon me
ek jaana chehra dhundha karti hai

bikharne ke baad bhid logon ki
ek udaas aansu gaalo pe therta hai
Fir unhi Bheegi jhuki aankhon se
Sooni kalaiyan taka karti hai

Kuch soch wahi palken utha ke
Fir wahi simt dekha karti hai
Chand chudiyon ki intezaar me
Paagal roye rehti hai”






“ kuch gehre khayaalon me
din bhar khoya rehta hai
chand tooti choodiyon ko
akele me chooma karta hai

jab aur log ghanti sunne pe
khaane ko jaaya karte hain
ye kuch note roz mod k
ek dibbe me jama karta hai

Guzarte waqt bazaar se
Roz wahi gali tham jaata hai
Rangeen choodiyon ko pyaar se
Dekhe jaye jata hai

Ek chehra fir ankhon pe
Kuch der theher jaata hai
Saabut choodiyan ka rang use
Zeher sa chubha jaata hai

Dobaara Fri kuch soch ke
Who note gina karta hai
chand tooti choodiyon ko
akele me chooma karta hai”


**You can say this is in response to Illusions and Prats post or may be it's extension but please don't compare me with them..i am new to hindi poetry..correct me ..where i am wrong.

10 comments:

  1. Hey dare you say such pathetic words...
    You can say this is in response to Illusions and Prats post or may be it's extension but please don't compare me with them

    U r equally good as we r .. i think better then me.. hold it hold it now dare you say No illusion! wen i say sumfin i mean it :D kiddng kiddng..
    On serious note both poems were good but with some spell errors.. or i guess its the difference in hindi & urdu.. do read t 1 to 2 times u will come to know it.. love you for continuing the HOT SIZzLING chooriyan fever

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  2. Spell errors..damn ..i neva used to get marks in language ..now got to know y :P :P

    ya, i know my silly mistakes :D...just cirrect me..ur comments are a booster for me and improves me a lot ...:)

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  3. *touched*
    *impressed*

    wat moere to say re .. this was so touching .. a new face to the bangle series !!

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  4. hey gul .. that was lovely... really impressive!! and i loved the pictures u ve used... really suited to the situations in the poems...!! great work!!

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