The fear in me
helps me never
in searching you
despite the fact
that i miss u
the heart in me
loves you
my brain never respond
on any feeling of your's
it makes me quite
quite and silent
as its before storm
the storm comes
just aftr you leave
it takes away everythng
that is with in me
and it too like you
makes me alone!
All alone on my own!
-IllusiOn!
P.S(I dedicate this poem to people who felt this feeling, the feeling of loneliness even in crowd)
SIGH!!!
ReplyDeleteThe feeling that something is missing..Like there is void... There is something amiss. just something. Sometimes we know what(or who) the missing part is but when you dont, it irritating to say the least!
On the flipside, the feeling when you are alone and yet feel that there is some1 right beside you is amazing...
Hope you and I feel it soon!
So thats for me too ;)
ReplyDeleteGood one !
A few lines from me:
ReplyDeleteYou go, as you have to
Leaving me behind
Stranded in this crowded world
A world that is not so kind
to me. Neither when we are together
Nor after you leave,
I know I cannot hide
You can see my heart's cleave.
If you are reading me,
You know what I meant
I just cannot flow with you, love
My life is so stagnant!
Well, I have been in this feeling - multiple times in my life. I know what it means. Hope you like my words above. Thanks for sharing ...
gosh !! just perfect depiction .. nights leave me feling so ..
ReplyDeleteTan !
ReplyDeletewow buddy! I am in love with your words! Great!
R.V
hope same dear
nan
thank u
Pretty
*hug* sniff sniff
Wow..
ReplyDeleteSweet,short n touchy..
ALL ALONE ON MY OWN..--gr8 line..
the pictures is so adorable wow!
ReplyDeletepoem:
all alone on my own :)
this one has the similar theme to the second last poem you've sent me!
Sheer improvement!
you should be more with prats and leo and mav and Kaj..
You will do wonders. wow!
*hugs*
and it too like you
ReplyDeletemakes me alone!
All alone on my own!
wow! the depction was apt.. I stil have to hone the skill of expressing myself in few lines - you have the talent ..teach me teach me.. :)
@Asbah: you actually mentioned my name with leo, rash and mav.. I am honoured but I dont think I am there yet.. I am still just a beginner.. :)
.a.
ReplyDeleteI definately wanna learn a big THANKS to pratz as she is helping me i wil definately look for help towrds leo, kajal,mav and rashi! hope dey will help
Pink Orchid
See you begining is that... accept it girl you can do magic ;) thanks for liking my piece..
Another piece with a tinge of solitude that every other being observe in eon he/she is bestowed with.
ReplyDeleteA real Beauty!!
my favorite lines:
it makes me quite
quite and silent
as its before storm
the storm comes
just aftr you leave
it takes away everythng
that is with in me
and it too like you
makes me alone!
All alone on my own!
UZ
ReplyDeleteThanks jani (hugs) fr this!