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I think this began well, until broken strings, when I think for the sake of rhyming sense went a little awry. On the whole a very thought-provoking piece though.
Yes, Sakhi, I agree wit you. But, I guess, the inconsistency however is an important aspect of the poem. :)
Extremely beautiful !! Simple awesome ! :)Well , in my opinion , its perfect , as in fact , from 5th line , the poem reflects deeper meaning and maybe thats why , you are still clinging to the musical thoughts ! :)
Thanks adreamygirl. Yes, almost all the lines have flipsides, deeper meanings concealed by the apparence of disconnected inanity. You sailed throught the mists and found out the hidden island. :)
Ah thats because I live in dreams :P and I am used to seeing things beyond the smoke-y words :)
Ahh! Then, I must acknowledge that you've got eyes of an eagle. :P
Hahahhaa...no not really :P Your words just opened my doors of thoughts :)
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