Her heart pumped faster than ever. She felt a lump in her throat. Felt knots in stomach.. The proximity increased with each step. He just took a small eye lash which was on her cheek and put it in his palm and asked her to wish for something good. She was like "Phew"
P.S. My very first attempt on 55 fiction.
Constructive Criticisms please :)
Cross posted from Enigmatic Rantings
cute! it was fun and possible!
ReplyDeletei enjoyed it!
romantic, is it?
ReplyDelete:)
loved the plot and the execution !! but the last line was bit crude ..
ReplyDeletecould be "she let out a sigh of disappointment mixed with relief .." smthing like ds :)
great!
ReplyDeletesuperb!!
ReplyDeleteawh, so sweet!
ReplyDeletethat was subtle and romantic!
ReplyDeleteBetter than mine.;-)..really nice..:-)..loved it..:-)..
ReplyDelete..sweet..
ReplyDeletecutely written
ReplyDeletebeing ur first attempt...its goood!!!
ReplyDeleteaMar ... never compare writes ! be proud of wat u wrote :)
ReplyDelete@Amar.. :) I second PS... don't compare.. yours is good too :)
ReplyDelete@all thanks guys :)