October 22, 2009

The Call

For the seventh time, he dint answer her call because he was angry at her for not calling him throughout the day.


The next morning he got a call from the police saying that the girl had an accident last night while driving using cell and his number was first on the recent call list..!!


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P.S. : This is my first attempt at writing 55 fiction, a form of fiction to be completed within a limit of 55 words. Its really challenging to complete the story in just 55 words. I found it interesting and so decided to give it a try..!! Do let me know how it was and if there are any suggestions for further improvement..!!! Crossposted from my blog.

12 comments:

  1. good one!

    good he did not talk or he would feel even more guilty i guess..

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  2. very good... all the best.. write more...

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  3. I think it's too obvious...55 fiction should not be so obvious

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  4. hi.... the above 2 ppl are right.. it is a lil obvious.. but i guess in this kind of writing practise makes perfect.. so keep trying.. wil be back for more..

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  5. Good attempt nevertheless... keep writing :)

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  6. @Shraddha: Thanks..N yeah ur perspective is good too..!!! I dint think abt that.!!

    @Meow: Thanks..I'll surely.!!

    @h : Hmm..I'll take care abt it the next time..!!thanks :)

    @PS : Thank u.!!

    @Tanmaya: Thanks 4 ur suggestions:)

    @ Tan, Amar, Princess, The Solitary Writer : Thanks a lot... :)

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