May 7, 2009

Another Sleepless Scribble

3:33 AM
In Response to Kajal's A Sleepless Scribble


Tan was always awake, when you tip-toed into the lounge. The gentle wind on your face through the window chilled his spine. He was sitting alone in another corner of the lounge, scribbling on his notepad – making absolutely no sound. It was lonely. It was cold. It was dark. Still, it was fun to be here. Suddenly, the door opened – a thin ray of light became wider as you came in. Tan could see you looking around, fearing if you have wakened anyone else. The notepad in your hand and the desire to write something was visible. You came in and sat near the window, at the corner. The waft ruffled a few strings of hair on your face. Probably you felt shy and you smiled. Diffidently, you sat down and started scribbling. Tan saw it all!

Tan wanted to shout aloud and say ‘Hi’ to you. He was so pleased to see someone alongside at this hour. He was overjoyed and was going to call you. But then, the wind blew again and those strands of hair alongside your chin flew. They brushed your face and you smiled – again! What a wonderful sight! That was something one could die for. Tan felt no different. He could not move. He could not utter anything else. He sat there – in tranquil – staring at the most beautiful sight he has ever seen.

Then you started scribbling. Your hands on the notepad were moving fast and faster. The thin rays of moonlight through the window pane made your face visible. The million dollar smile on your face was noticeable. He noticed it all the time you were there. Tan smiled within himself. Looking at you in harmony gave him eternal peace. All silent! Then suddenly you stood up. The silence broke with the sound of tearing and folding paper. Probably, your scribbling was over and so was the heavenly time. You left the torn paper from your notepad on the table near the window and left the lounge. The door opened and closed – making no further noise.

“Ka…” a soft cry came out of Tan’s mouth, after the long silence; but it was so weak that it could not reach your ears. You did not hear anything and you left. The door closed into silence again. A dark, cold and lonely silence! It was sad and dull. Tan sat down and reluctantly he took his notepad and wrote what you just read. He did not want to, but he wrote, just for the sake of letting you know that he was there – always – all the time! It was silent again, as he finishes writing the note – to you!

30 comments:

  1. awweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!! Tan.. that was soooooooooooooooooo sweet!! :) oh my god!! I am so awed by the way you pictured it all.. :) hheeheheh I was planning to clap but that will be noisy, so I will just whisper a 'thank you' :) I hope you heard that loud and clear.. :D

    okie me off to bed, I hope I get to sleep.. but your post was oh so special.. makes me feel like its my birthday.. :) thanks again.. :)

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  2. Hehehehe I will read it one more time, before I log out..:D

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  3. Thanks... I just wrote what I saw there, in the lonely lounge... nothing special!!

    Your birthday? You born again today? Dont tell me!! hahaha...

    Sleep well... GN :)

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  4. And again, thanks for the read :) Happy to see you liked it - as much!

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  5. special it is.. read it from my point of view.. :) and yeah not like reborn wala birthday,,,..that special birthday you feeling you get, when friends call up to wish or surprise you with something really sweet.. this was one such special surprise.. :)

    i am gonna be reading the third time now.. :P

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  6. Sleep now! Its 4 AM!!
    Too late... No one is going to remove the post from here... read it later tomorrow... sleep now... :P

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  7. :D yeah will sleep now.. good night Tan.. :) I'd remember this part of lounging always..thank you.. goodnight..it is so cutely insane or insanely cute.. but me loved it!! :D

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  8. Tan,

    That was really sweet.. Sorry I just pooped up in this cozy conversation of you two.. But couldn't help..

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  9. The lounge is undergoin metamorphosis...
    From a virtual world to a real home...

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  10. That was AWESOME TAN!!! Wow! I read it with Awwwwwwwwww all the time. You got Kajal grining I'm sure. That was awesome!

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  11. @Ms R:I was soo sooo soooooooo happy reading this.. ek second ke liye bachi hui neend bhi ud gayi thi.. ;)

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  12. I can imagine! That was so sweet of him. This place is like home for us now. Reading something like this didn't feel a bit wierd. Just felt.. Normal :)

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  13. @Ms R: It all felt so real last night.. had fun.. really.. :D thank you for calling it home dearie.. Lounge loves you back and you are family now.. :D

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  14. I'm touched hun. I can imagine how real it felt. Just reading it made me goo awwww and shoo shuueett :D And we're definitely not cuckoo in the head! LOL!

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  15. its home really...atleast for me its my home...stay here all the time 24 hours...gawd save me

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  16. kaju has two birthdays? :O

    heheh... nicely written bro! its really home indeed!

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  17. Oh! Did I miss all the fun in the interactions of the above comments?? I think so... How did I!!

    Thanks Ms R and Kajal for carrying on with the intereactions... I am blessed to have you mates alongside... encouragement!!!

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  18. Vinay

    I really miss you at times in the Lounge... Did you create different IDs and moved to a new one?? I felt so...

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  19. Aparna

    Thanks for the appreciation...

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  20. Hashan

    At times, come during this time... this place rocks at nights... SIMBLY rocks...

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  21. Arun

    Metamorphosis? Hahaha... Hope the change would be in all good forms...

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  22. FreeLancer

    Happy that you liked it... Lonely Nights make me do all these... It is home to all of us... trust me...

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  23. Thanks ZM

    Thanks for Pooping in ;) It always helps. A word or two of encouragement does help...

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  24. Ms R,

    if the story made Kajal grin it would be my best comlpement... dont you think so? I loved the conversation in the two posts - during that time, on that night... Happy that you shared so much :)

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