Risk
in
loving you
wont resist,
temptations within me.
the ones that keep on erupting...
When I dream of Nights within The heat of your arms!
(POETIC CRIES)(http://19goes20.blogspot.com)
Waiting for a reply on my first try on FIB POETRY From masters of this format like Hashan, Prats and other fellow louge members who write FIB brilliantly! Correct me please If I missed some rule! thanks all :)
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Nice one Pulkit...!!!
ReplyDeletei dont know anything Abt FIB so, to me it is a good work done..!!!
I absolutely loved the last line! I dont really care about the syllables :P but the emotion and style with which you have written this struck quite a few chords in me!
ReplyDeleteHaha..I am just a good pupil of Prats :D
ReplyDeleteIt was awesome Pulkit..i didnt count the syllable coz its looks fantastic for me !! I loved it..lets see what Prats says..:))
Cheers
nice one pulkit...its nice to see u experimenting in FIB and coming up with this beautiful piece
ReplyDeletePulkit, i leave the choice of syllables to you .. u can check it yourself from the syllable counter !
ReplyDeletenow for the poem .. It was irresistible read :D !! wonderful !! where is next part ??
Accept compliments frm an amatuer....It was beautiful....to say da least! luvd it! :)
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem ..no doubts on that one :D
ReplyDelete@ yamini - thanks for the appreciation!
ReplyDeletethanks RV! for the involved reading...
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and for the appreciation!
@ hashan - thanks bro! me too joining the club of her pupils with this post.. much more to learn from the queen of FIB nd FICTION 55 here @ WL!
ReplyDelete@ aparna - thanks dear:)
ReplyDelete@ prats - thanks for inspiring!
ReplyDeletethanks for the awesome reply!
counted the syllables... its a fibonacci!
:)
all's well it seems!
thanks thanks thanks... for the appreciation! meant a lot for me!
@ maverick - thanks sir! loved ur blog too! read it yesterday and has followed it too:)
ReplyDelete@ mysterious gal - kind words and gentle appreciation is a great boost as always...
ReplyDeleteyou all make me feel so OLD wen u call urself my pupil ;) !
ReplyDeletewill kill Leo when i meet him !! he gave ds "teacher" name to me !
wowwwwwwww.. :) *when I dream of nights within the heat of your arms!!*
ReplyDeletethis was like super duper Mush!! :)
Pulkit, accept a bow .. \m/
@ prats - age is just ur own expression... atleast thats what I define as the age of someone creative like u!
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@ kajal = bows back! still... drunk in the essence of ur post "fading away..." one of the best things I had ever read