March 14, 2009

Twisted Chooriyan...


(Sincere apologies for posting this rubbish... but just could'nt resist myself... !!)

Tooti chooriyan lekar baithi thi haath mein,
Jab aaya kahi se woh raat mein,
Aansu poche mere aur kaha,
“Roti ho kyon, main hoon naa saath mein!”

“Aa teri chooriyan judva doon,
Inko fevicol se chipka doon,
Ya kahe to tere liye,
Unbreakable chooriyan banva doon?”

“Paise ki tangi hai aaj kal,
Kaanch ki chooriyan, pehna naa kar,
Toot jaayegi jo fir ye chooriyan,
Nayi chooriyan naa de paoonga lakar!”

“Utaar phenk ye chooriyan,
Hai hamara pyaar ek atoot bandhan,
La badha de ab apni kalai,
Pehna doon tujhe sone ke kangan!!”

9 comments:

  1. very nice!
    esp
    Utaar phenk ye chooriyan,
    Hai hamara pyaar ek atoot bandhan,
    La badha de ab apni kalai,
    Pehna doon tujhe sone ke kangan!!”

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  2. Yeh toh kavita mein bhi twist aa gaya!

    "...Inko fevicol se chipka doon,
    Ya kahe to tere liye,
    Unbreakable chooriyan banva doon?"

    ROFLMAO!

    I wish my guy also says the last 4 lines... it's every girl's dream!! Diamonds would be prefereable though!

    Humorous, different, nice, and has a sweet message in the end...

    good try!

    Cheers!

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  3. @ uz.. thanks.. that verse was suggested by my mom... credit goes to her...!!

    @ neha.. glad to know you liked it... last verse is momma's creation... i think she always wanted to hear it from dad..lol..!!

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  4. diamond studded! way to go Neha :)

    @Mona: beauty it was..it turned out to sone ke kangan - khara sona is the poem :)

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  5. awwwww.....
    sooo sweeet...
    i really loved it...
    i mean its so much real sort :)

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  6. @ kajal n ste... thanks!

    @ prats... was waiting for ur comment... i realy thought u wud murder me for this.. lol.. glad u liked it though!!

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  7. who says life doesnt have funny moments ?? well done !!

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  8. my emotions to it were like this:

    aw sad, must be nostalgia!
    wow he comes!
    ain? what :O
    LoL
    *dies laughing*
    wakes up !
    lol!
    ops? nalaik...
    what :O
    awesome!!!!!!!

    kya brilliant last verse :D



    per itni mehngai mai sonay ke kangan :S naqli hungay ;)



    Neha, have your fingers crossed ;)

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