February 5, 2009

ILLICIT



I L L I C I T
this you called
my relation!!
How Dare you ??

Did you E V E R
even try once
to understand
my dried tears?

He cares,not
L o v e s.
He heals,not
H u r t s.

You taunted my
crumpled SOUL,
he mend it back,
noble thoughts.

You DUMPED me,now
in her welcome bed,
He GATHERED my wings
to a pure land he led..

Your nerve to disown
my tears and wounds,
I call it JEALOUSY...
YOU are no good as HIM.

now L E A V E my
heart's dark nooks
before i cut myself out
to empty your very being..

16 comments:

  1. wooowwwwww prats.. beautiful , painful and could relate to it.. keep bringing more. ...

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  2. quite dark and vengeful...NOICE!

    Scribblers Inc.

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  3. painful to the core...he did not deserve your love....

    tension not...stepcock:Superheroes ka Baap is here to teach everyone a lesson...gimme the name and address of this person and i will see to it that i delete the word "illicit" from his system ;-)

    Stepcock:Superheroes ka Baap...with great powers come great responsibilities..n some side effects...

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  4. thanks Pink!! sometimes blaming others is so easy ... do we ever think of other's feelings !!

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  5. Enjoyed every bit of it!
    Each word has been selected so aptly and the stanzas haven been woven so beautifully, then I just couldn't stop admiring.

    A wonderful portrayal of a wounded heart.

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  6. arey prats di ;)
    this one z so poignant

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  7. Thanks Scribbler.. I rarely write such dark poem,,,, but this one just flowed ...

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  8. Wow, Nw dis is intense! Luvd da way u portrayed anguish! Prats at her best again! :)

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  9. @ pratz..

    :D so dark but so touchng... it touched me.. :$

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  10. stepCOCK ... kono baat nahi ... main dekh lengi usko !! ;) thanks for the support anyway :)

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  11. My pleasure Mohita .. thanks for the good words :)

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  12. thanksie fr the read Nan :)

    @Maverick : m glad it came out well.. i had serious doubts abt it ... ;)

    Illusion .. thnaku swt hrt :)

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  13. The last line..Was amazing..I love it.. I have nothing to say to you but yeah, I know that feelings! and it sucks!!

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  14. The last line..Was amazing..I love it.. I have nothing to say to you but yeah, I know that feelings! and it sucks!!

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  15. Once hurt, always hurt. Dark and beautifully portrayed the either relationship, one filled with suspicion,deceit,not so true as looks love and other of pure feelings as in care and mutual love.

    :)..gr8 goin

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