He feared rains.
It was raining,like the day she died.
Just then he heard a baby's cries in the garden.his neighbour's kid was stuck in rains,all alone.
He deliberated but with the next cry,he ran outside.
He failed her that day, but saved a life today.
He no longer feared rains.
ps : This is a 55 fiction ... means it has just 55 words .. just an experiment :)
55 words only perhaps...
ReplyDeletebut that 55 words spoke volumes!! loved it a lot...
nicely penned prats!! :)
thanks vinay ... sorry i always call u with ur blog name :)
ReplyDeleteglad u liked my try .....
umm, thats no problem...
ReplyDeleteu can call me either one, its ok.
small correction...
i dint "like" ur try...i "loved" it. like a poem speaks thoughts in a different way, ur story does too...!! :)
but m new with stories, i know only poems...!! :D so i hand it over to the better writers here, to do it justice and back my views!! :)
Omg! I was just thinking of something like this that is a short story less than 100 words...
ReplyDeleteThis just to prove that the amount of words are no measure of the power of the story to be told! I loved it! Brilliant!
hehe! lovely! i am challenging myself for something of a like too, my last two posts at my blog also depicts that i am falling for very very short pieces, of never having to explain anything, weird for someone like me!
ReplyDeletebut anyway, repeating what i said at rashi's story, i simple loved this one too biya! awesome :)
hey yes guess ......i have beaten u guys
ReplyDeletenicely done pretty
check my 35 words post
@ Leo : just like u, even i am more into writing poetry so short writes suit me :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for "loving" my write ...
thats so nice of u Rashi .. for appreciating so much of my writes... n i agree.. words can not be a judge for the feelings ...
ReplyDeletethanks asbah!!! n i too love short writes.. leave a lot of scope for the reader to imagine...
ReplyDeleteLove this photo. Contain a meaning of human life inside.
ReplyDeleteloved the feelings behind the story.
ReplyDelete"he no longer feared rains."
Welcome Tikno .. and thanks for the comment :)
ReplyDelete@ Lover : thanks for the understanding ..
Hey- "Pretty You" .. ;)
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome... So small, so good n so complete....
Hey, can anyone find other words for - good, awesome n so on..... I keep writing those again n again... But i mean it everytime i write it...
CHeers..!!
Arjun
Wow.. this was nice.. great stuff..
ReplyDeleteha ha .. Arjun .. ur comments are as good as ur post ;) !! then u too will have to find words for me to thanks you everytime :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Karmasura :)