July 24, 2009

With or Without You



My heart is right but my words are wrong
With a confused mind i make them songs
and yet, what do i do?
I woke up late to greet the morning
Why oh heart, didnt you heed the warning?
I am lost without you

Bring out the spears and tear my heart
Hurt my wounds and split it apart
I surrender to you
Tie me up and hang me by my neck
Shoot me down, just kill my rage
Let me die before you

I can't live if you are gone
But if you are gone then you have won
I can't hold you back
In this city, i sleep alone tonight
With your dreams i have to fight
My life's been painted black

Days of our lives have come to an end
I crumble to dust,i turn into sands
And your eyes still haunt me
I am weak, i know and you are strong
I knew it was coming, i knew it all along
So now i lie down to thee...


P.S having one of those rare mood swings....one after many many months...so just bear with me

26 comments:

  1. Your best write till date...according to me! Simply fantastic...

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  2. i dunno...i stil think the best is yet to come

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  3. 5 stars! Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant!

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  4. I choose my word with difficulty like never before
    I speak with a guilt, unaware, unsure,
    And yet, what do I do?
    I lie down awake, with night around
    Building hopes, knowing I am wrong
    Still I want you back,

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  5. Wish u luck wid da mood swing....but its brought out a gem of a poem...wonderfully crafted! luvd it!

    PS: quite familiar wid dat mood swing thingy, FL! happens! :)

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  6. superb write FL..

    Days of our lives have come to an end
    I crumble to dust,i turn into sands

    love this line...

    have these mood swings often...

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  7. I am curious whether is this inspired with any personal incidents or somthing..?

    because I am huge fan of amything dark and raw..and this poem was Just about that...!

    Nice blend of words..and nice ...umm..word play..! ( i wanted to say movie..but this is a write up for gods sakes. Even the word 'word-sequence ' didnt sound appropriate for this beautiful poem..)

    keep it all the way up..may be in the stars..:-P

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  8. @ maverick
    lols...mood swings wil be the end of me one day

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  9. @ arun
    you actually liked it??
    gosh i just wrote it in anger

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  10. @ rashmi
    bingo gal...
    sumthn did inspire me to write ths

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  11. each line left me with a :( dude..somehow cud relate 2 each stanza especially tis...
    "I can't live if you are gone
    But if you are gone then you have won
    I can't hold you back
    In this city, i sleep alone tonight
    With your dreams i have to fight
    My life's been painted black"..

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  12. @●๋•guℓѕнαn●๋•™ , saw some reality in u'r lines :(

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  13. nice yaar..!!!
    jst hv chk on ur moods swings.!!!..dy r actually not them...may b smthng else tht made u write dis...neways
    its was vry good..!!!xcellnt

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  14. Did u notice one thing.. jab bhi yeh mood swings hote hai tab hi kuch acha likhne ko miltha hai ! :D hope you come out of ur mood swings soon !!!

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  15. lols thoorz
    mera toh sadiyo baad ho raha hai

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  16. Chaliya write :) As RT said one of your best write !!

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  17. very nicely written..!!! keep penning dear...!!!

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  18. definitely ur best .. but made me a bit sad too ... cheer up soon my miththu :)

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