May 12, 2009

Love blind...



"We aren't meant to be...never..." she said...devastating him...

Days passed....
He rang her  "come to my place...once...for oldtimes sake..."

She came...
"Come in..."

silence overwhelmed them ....
"What do you want..??" she asked...
"I just want you to be present"
He slit his throat...
She died for the rest of her life...


P.S- My first attempt at 55 fiction...hope it came out good...
        @Rose- sorry...i liked the theme very much couldn't resist writing about it.
        Ciao...

24 comments:

  1. Ohhhhh! It gave me a 'heart sinking' feeling.

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  2. *shudders*

    it really gave me goosebumps!

    why cant we have more happy ends :( i will try to find some i reckon!

    Ps. Arun :) this is brilliant :) i really loved it!

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  3. what was dat??? wow...its dark and awesome and creepy and fantastic

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  4. @Ms.R
    Thank u..

    @Prats...
    thanks mate...glad u r still here...

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  5. @HKB
    Happy that my story heart sunk u....
    glad i had an effect on u..

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  6. @Asbah..
    Thanks for the appreciation mate..
    am writing one with happy ending rite now...

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  7. @Blossomblue
    Thanks gal..

    @freelancer...
    thanks mate...creepy...??? well it depends...

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  8. Hey Arun,

    Firslty, dont be sorry...See even if I hate the theme, people here loved your work!

    The way its written is beautiful...congrats:)

    Keep up the good work..I'm glad to be on your list, such a thoughtfull writer, you just let "it" flow, and I loved that:)

    P.S.--It hurt me a lot...tears in my eyes..you can call me an "emo"...but I really cant stand things like this...:((

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  9. @Rose...
    Thanks for ur appreciation...u r generous...

    I'm cho chorry...but its jus a story...n i've also titled it "Love blind"...a foollish decision by the protagonist blinded by love ....

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  10. oh...so sweet but told you na..m more of an emo...thts wny away from mush..But ye Wl hai k..kissi ko nai bakshta:D

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  11. @rose...
    Im not good in hindi.... :-)

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  12. ouch....that left me wid goosebups arun...55 words n u did full justice to it...

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  13. I think I should try this out.. Letting the one you love feel what loss is?!!!

    For your style brilliant!!

    And please tell me what is 55 fiction???

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  14. @i me myself..
    think u very much shweta...

    @zendagi migzara..
    55 fiction is just completing a story or poem with in 55 words...i think prats introduced it...jus click the tag in the bottom of the post "55 fiction"...
    there have already been numerous stories published,...

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  15. ouch ouch ouch! wonderful Arun.. it was bang on..!!

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