I dono what to call it, but err, read:
Right when the moon hung low!
and night was passing with a tread so slow,
standing b'neath the orchid's bough,
her cheek lit with a divine glow!
she smiled, she laughed and cried in a row,
and drown in his eyes, his brow!
when the stars celebrated the unison below,
the heavens cried, 'let it grow!!'
Love, had bought them a brillant show!
working on my take for Choka!
Beautiful it is, Asbah! Wonderful wrk as always from u! :)
ReplyDeleteoh i forgot to mention:
ReplyDeleteThankyou Rash and Vin for helping me with it :)
Mav, thankyou :) glad you liked it!
Islexxxxxxxxx...i simply loved the lines "her cheek lit with a divine glow" n " and drown in his eyes, his brow!"
ReplyDeletethe last line needs a bit polish...pales in comparison to the other lines
hehe you werent there na guru :(
ReplyDeletebina polish post kerna pada :(
cute write asbah :)
ReplyDeletesweet one Asbah !! no wonder i am in awe of ur writing !! :)
ReplyDeletenice one asbah
ReplyDeletei'm waiting for your interview....i have soo many questions to ask you
this poetry style is simple and interesting....i will try it too
hehe wow thankyou peeps :)
ReplyDeletewwwwwwwwooooooooowwwwwwwww! asbah... :)
ReplyDeleteapplauds!!