March 16, 2009

Monorhyme - my take.

I dono what to call it, but err, read:

Right when the moon hung low!
and night was passing with a tread so slow,
standing b'neath the orchid's bough,
her cheek lit with a divine glow!
she smiled, she laughed and cried in a row,
and drown in his eyes, his brow!

when the stars celebrated the unison below,
the heavens cried, 'let it grow!!'

Love, had bought them a brillant show!



working on my take for Choka!

9 comments:

  1. Beautiful it is, Asbah! Wonderful wrk as always from u! :)

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  2. oh i forgot to mention:

    Thankyou Rash and Vin for helping me with it :)


    Mav, thankyou :) glad you liked it!

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  3. Islexxxxxxxxx...i simply loved the lines "her cheek lit with a divine glow" n " and drown in his eyes, his brow!"

    the last line needs a bit polish...pales in comparison to the other lines

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  4. hehe you werent there na guru :(
    bina polish post kerna pada :(

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  5. sweet one Asbah !! no wonder i am in awe of ur writing !! :)

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  6. nice one asbah
    i'm waiting for your interview....i have soo many questions to ask you


    this poetry style is simple and interesting....i will try it too

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  7. wwwwwwwwooooooooowwwwwwwww! asbah... :)
    applauds!!

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