March 12, 2009

Chooriyan

Inspired by Insi's poem Tooti chooriyan


rangon bhari chooriyan
mujhko sadaa se pyaari thi
kaanch ki ya laakh ki
inki har adaa lagti nyaari thi.

us roz vo mere liye
kaanch ki chooriyan laya
meri kalai ko chooma
aur naazon se pehnaya.

har choori ne jo mujhe chooya,
dil uske saath bandh gaya
us din sahi maayne me
chooriyon se mera naata ban gaya.

par jab juda hone ka waqt aaya
chooriyon ne dil ha haal jahir kiya
main to chup rehna chahti thi,
par vo toot gain,aur dard zahir kiya.

hum dono roye,main dard ke bahaane,
aur vo mere dard ke liye roya
har choori jo toot kar giri,
aisa laga maine usko hi kho diya.

aaj bhi main uske intezaar me
raah par nazar tikaye baithi hoon,
vo fir aayega mere liye chooriyaan lekar
aisi ummed me haath soone rakhe rehti hoon.

kise ye samjhaaon man ki baat,
Chooriyaan aaj bhi mere ko bhaati hain
par nahi pehanti unko aaj kal main
kyonki vo us aakhri raat ki yaad dilati hain.

23 comments:

  1. Sigh!

    Chooriyaan aaj bhi mere ko bhaati hain

    Isnt it supposed to be mujhe? I dont know but feel so.. Care to clarify some1??


    Babe wonderful! I love bangles and something similar has happened but the glass actually cut my wrists.. But for very violent reasons... Hence I do wear the bangles...To challenge him to try and do it once more.. HE has lost the right to hurt me ! :D

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  2. guess you are right girl .. i will edit it :)

    and as for the latter part of your comment... life is a collection of memories dear .. cherish it :)

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  3. ahha..I felt very romantic.. badhiya hai, badhiya hai...
    liked the line " aur naazon se pehnaya"

    ^_^

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  4. u know .. even i loved the live .. i guess i love the word "naaz" :)

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  5. Wow better than mine *hats off* pratz but guess what i am wid an answer to dis poem of your's and later i read that u wrote it gettn inspired by mine !
    Hehehe here cums series of choriyan ;)
    loved your poem the feel was awesum

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  6. Wow better than mine *hats off* pratz but guess what i am wid an answer to dis poem of your's and later i read that u wrote it gettn inspired by mine !
    Hehehe here cums series of choriyan ;)
    loved your poem the feel was awesum

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  7. waiting for your poem now Insi .. guess you will give me good practice in hindi poetry writing !! n plz.. this cant be better than yours.. tours was the real inspiration !

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  8. wow.. lovely... i understood.. hehe

    hum dono roye,main dard ke bahaane,
    aur vo mere dard ke liye roya


    nice....

    Cheers..!!
    Arjun

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  9. bahut shandar
    kya bat hai hindi me tum itna accha likhati ho pata hi nahi tha
    very good
    like this lines

    "Chooriyaan aaj bhi mere ko bhaati hain
    par nahi pehanti unko aaj kal main
    kyonki vo us aakhri raat ki yaad dilati hain."

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  10. Poignant!

    You never cease to surprise me Prats... :)

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  11. too good ..i love bangles..me too writing..butpls it wont be at par like u guys..insi and u wr jst outstanding

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  12. woww...lovely lovely lovely!!
    great prats...i loved every line...every emotion expressed!!
    toooo gud!!

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  13. my roomate too loved that line Arjun.. glad u understood urself .. m spared the effort ;)

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  14. Ah!! m glad you liked it Chirag :) nice choice of lines !!

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  15. My pleasure Neha :)

    Liked your write a lot Gul dearie ... keep on !!

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  16. m so very happy to see your comment Priyanka .. :) thankuu

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  17. haaiiii wah kyaa baath kahi hai..

    tht was just lovely dear.. :)

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  18. hehe why blushing. when thts the truth.. :) be proud of what ur doing :)

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  19. wow prats... that was too good..!! loved it.. awesome flow... !!

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