"It's over", you said with no emotion,
And walked away with the other girl,
Those words slashed my heart like a knife,
And the bleeding was uncontrollable.....
I still remember your false promise,
That your love for me would never change,
You broke your promise, and shattered my dreams,
Left me feeling lonely, shocked and strange.....
I gave up everything for you,
My dreams and my desires,
And you gave me only pain in return,
You set my emotions to fire.....
Am still roaming about,
Trying to collect the ashes,
Still trying to heal my heart,
Full of bruises and scratches.....
This break up has broken me,
Shattered me to a million pieces,
And though I try to act strong,
Deep down, the pain never ceases!!!!
superb mona! so touching....
ReplyDeleten u sure rhyme it all...all d time! ;)
Nice poem...................were you inspired by past experience?
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Superbly written ....
ReplyDeleteNicely Rhymed ....
Just one tiny thing ..shouldn't it be "on fire" rather than "to fire"...The latter doesn't sound wrong though :)
nice nicee..
ReplyDeletewell its mona ..
sweet nad heartfelt :)
ReplyDeletehey i know it hurts a lot, but eventually everything falls in place..nice work
ReplyDeletegreat poem! and keep the faith! u have better things coming your way! i speak out of experience!
ReplyDeletebreak ups are very difficult to handle. i can understand. have seen hell lot of people suffer. my own best friend died cz she couldn't handle it.
ReplyDeletebut i know you're strong Mona.
coming to the poem...heart rendering...and touching...
Take Care
really touching..
ReplyDeleteand all one is left with is memories
@ all... thanks for the appreciation... and the poem is inspired by a hypothetical situation... i havent really had a break-up... lol...
ReplyDeletei dono i skimmed through the poem.. maybe because i dont want to cry again!
ReplyDeleteThe pain will cease,
ReplyDeleteBind into one will all the pieces,
Keep hope, keep faith,
This too will end!!!