Happy Birthday Shruti From everyone here at Writers lounge. Welcome to the 17th Step of Life
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Original post by "The Lover":
Her : I'm sorry. Forget what happened. That will be best for us.
Me : Do you think that just a sorry will make everything go away?
Her : Well, all I can do is apologise for that night. Just forget what happened.
Me : What about the kiss?
Her : It didn't mean anything.
Me : A Kiss Always Means Something...
What did it mean?
Asbah's take on the same and her twist:
Him : I'm sorry. Forget what happened. That will be best for us.
Me : Do you think that just a sorry will make everything go away?
Him : Well, all I can do is apologise for that night. Just forget what happened.
Me : What about the kiss?
Him : It didn't mean anything.
Me : A Kiss Always Means Something...
Him: Sometimes few things have no meanings. Nothing, I'm sorry. I'm not for you, trust me.
Me: Smiles.
Him: thankyou! thankyou for understanding.
Me: Smiles again.
Him: Goodbye!
*a gun shoot, sound of a bullet piercing in the skin, smell of something burning, the red color over the carpet and the floor.*
Me: Smiles. when I kissed you I told you one thing; if I wont be yours sweetheart, remember you wont be anyone else's.
Sandeep's version of the continuation:
I dashed out of his house and walked towards my car fuming and cursing myself for trusting a cheat. My tears seemed to have dried up. Probably he was not worthy enough to deserve them. I had no feeling of remorse within. No sooner had i reached my car that i noticed a bouquet of blue roses, which were my favorite, kept atop it. I couldn't get a hang of what this meant. With trembling hands i reached out for the letter tucked in between the flowers.
"Love....Happy April fool's day!
My dumbhead...how could i ever afford to let you walk away just like that....
you sealed our love with that kiss. It meant the world to me.
I love you."
I stood there dumbfounded. My throat went dry all of a sudden. My legs seemed to give away. I gathered myself and rushed to his house. He lay there in a pool of blood.
Me: Ohh...What have i done? Ohhh god!!
Him: ..............
Me: Am so sorry dear...am so sorry...Please keep your eyes open...Stay awake...Please..Oh God!
Him: ..............
Me: Here....take this gun and shoot me. I dont deserve to live. Not without you. Please.
Him: ..............
Me: Please say something...Please...I wont be able to forgive myself ever.
Him: ..............
Me: Shoot me....Kill me....Curse me....Please.......Say something....Ohhhh Godddd...
Him: ......A....KKKK.....KKiss.......Always......mmmm.....means sss.......somethinggg..................aaaaahhhhhhhhh........ ........... ...... .... .. . . . . . . . . .
September 13, 2008
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Sorry adi but cud not resist after asbah's take on the same. Hope you wont mind ;-)
ReplyDeleteAnd hope we have managed to crack the riddle "What did it mean?"...he he...cheers!
islex....you led me into this..that girl side of the story was too tempting to let go...he he.....
ReplyDeleteheyyy twin...came to do wht u said...hehehe.......n here u are cooking up stupid stories!! hehe...
ReplyDeletechai peene gye the aap...never called back!!! ;)
hey twin....welcome to the comment box...oops..you saw this!! he he..aise hi dimaag main aaya toh addition kar diya....was fun...he he......hope you liked it....and great to know tht you liked mona's posts n u commented....a pat on the back!
ReplyDeletedamn!!
ReplyDeletei told a friend to check the story, she said dono parts tumne likhay mainay kaha nai aik, she said and the third one? i said, third what, and oh yes i knew who could be blammed!!
Love you for writing this, she loved ur part more!! awesome man, you can write whatever, whereever, whenever!
and yaaa...abt the call...wil give u a buzz in a day or two yaar...was busy wid onam celebrations yaar...after talkin wid you some guests came over...uske baad we went out.....study hard for your semester papers...best luck!
ReplyDelete*ting ting* twin??
ReplyDeleteaha how are they? did you click pics?
ReplyDeleteachhhi story banai...gud gud...u create a twist in every story...mast tha!
ReplyDeletemona ki poems bahut sahi lagi mujhe...even went to her blog to read more...tooo gud! aap bhi padhna uske blog pe...
so how was onam??
priyanka, welcome in :) I am glad someone else commented too!
ReplyDeleteislexxxxxxxxxx.........ha ha ha ha ha....thanx......honoured....was fun yaar.....after reading your take cud not resist myself.....thought how could i get more mileage out of the kiss.....n then this came across....wrote it that instant...he he...
ReplyDelete@islex
ReplyDeletefull credit to you for taking the "kiss" to the second part in such a hilarious take...i just added on to yours.....he he....
hiiii asbah...hav heard a lot bout u...u write really well :)
ReplyDeleteawesome!! and you know that :D
ReplyDeleteOyi, *flattered* ty ty ...
ReplyDelete*swells*
anyone solve the *twin* mystery ?
ReplyDeletehey asbah...meet priyanka....she is my superjunior in MBA. Twin is her nick coz we had calls from MICA(india's premier advertising course campus) but left it to join our college. And twin...visit asbah's blog too...she is too good to be true....he he...islex, have you commented on a poem priyanka has written posted by me here....check out my labels and the lone poem which springs up is written by her.....do comment....
ReplyDeletei commented all, no ? leme see.. !!
ReplyDelete*meeting amazing people is a treat* :) welcome in :)
priyanka is my biggest fan islex...always the first one to comment on my blog....he he...donno how she sniffed and came across this silly take of mine as soon as i posted it.....he he....
ReplyDeletepriyanka...how about asbah's gun treatment in the second part? i almost died laughing after reading that...
onam ki pics kab bhejoge???
ReplyDeleteexpecting to see elephants, flower rangoli, girls in white sarees, special meal on big green leaf, n boat race( vo aapne cancel kar dia tha!!)...dekhi meri knowledge!! ;)
yup islex...pics clicked..will send them across when i go back to mumbai next weekend.....will mail across to you as well twin...
ReplyDeletethe day was awesome yaar...do wiki onam to know about the harvest festival of kerala...had an awesome lunch which we call onam sadhya on a banana leaf.....yummyyy!!!
twin..
ReplyDeleteha ha ha...wow! hmmm...good knowledge...hmmm...elephants...girls in white sarees n banana leaf snaps ticked....boat race happens some 3 hours from my place...it was a watery onam this time around...heavy rains lashing in this part of the world......
yaa..read dat...funny take on wht was originally posted as a senti small piece...!!
ReplyDeleteyes yes i did wiki too :D the girl dancing in white sari was too cool
ReplyDeletewow rains?
@priyanka...
ReplyDeleteWat is life without funny takes dear...he he
@islex
ReplyDeleteSo the wiki gal knows all abt onam now. Gr8 gr8!
is onam same as pongal which is celebrated in TN coz its their harvest festival
ReplyDeletehmm lover,asbah and now sandeeps take on The Kiss :p
ReplyDeletewas good though
just only we 3 or 4 commenting here
ita okay, remember we're still a novice here :) once it be active people will jump in InshAllah!
ReplyDeleteok, yes i have a detailed idea bout it will be great when you'll send pictures :)
hmmm yeah sandeep
ReplyDeletedo forwrd ur onam pictures to my mail adress.....my mailbox is eagerly waiting for those picx.....dont disappoint my mail id ....hehehe
hw wud it be wh+en mail box,inbox,blogs and sites start speaking ....that wud be fun naa...we just need to talk to them or order them and they will do the desired job ...
oh wow..
ReplyDeletewell sorry for being late.. kind of got stuck with the onam celebrations.. oh happy onam btw lol.. hope u had nice sadhya n all the works..
well kiss always mean's something.. but this was such a twist.. need to catch up on the previous one's ..