My heart is right but my words are wrong
With a confused mind i make them songs
and yet, what do i do?
I woke up late to greet the morning
Why oh heart, didnt you heed the warning?
I am lost without you
Bring out the spears and tear my heart
Hurt my wounds and split it apart
I surrender to you
Tie me up and hang me by my neck
Shoot me down, just kill my rage
Let me die before you
I can't live if you are gone
But if you are gone then you have won
I can't hold you back
In this city, i sleep alone tonight
With your dreams i have to fight
My life's been painted black
Days of our lives have come to an end
I crumble to dust,i turn into sands
And your eyes still haunt me
I am weak, i know and you are strong
I knew it was coming, i knew it all along
So now i lie down to thee...
With a confused mind i make them songs
and yet, what do i do?
I woke up late to greet the morning
Why oh heart, didnt you heed the warning?
I am lost without you
Bring out the spears and tear my heart
Hurt my wounds and split it apart
I surrender to you
Tie me up and hang me by my neck
Shoot me down, just kill my rage
Let me die before you
I can't live if you are gone
But if you are gone then you have won
I can't hold you back
In this city, i sleep alone tonight
With your dreams i have to fight
My life's been painted black
Days of our lives have come to an end
I crumble to dust,i turn into sands
And your eyes still haunt me
I am weak, i know and you are strong
I knew it was coming, i knew it all along
So now i lie down to thee...
P.S having one of those rare mood swings....one after many many months...so just bear with me
Your best write till date...according to me! Simply fantastic...
ReplyDeletei dunno...i stil think the best is yet to come
ReplyDelete5 stars! Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant!
ReplyDeleteI choose my word with difficulty like never before
ReplyDeleteI speak with a guilt, unaware, unsure,
And yet, what do I do?
I lie down awake, with night around
Building hopes, knowing I am wrong
Still I want you back,
dunno y i wrote it :@
ReplyDeleteWish u luck wid da mood swing....but its brought out a gem of a poem...wonderfully crafted! luvd it!
ReplyDeletePS: quite familiar wid dat mood swing thingy, FL! happens! :)
superb write FL..
ReplyDeleteDays of our lives have come to an end
I crumble to dust,i turn into sands
love this line...
have these mood swings often...
I am curious whether is this inspired with any personal incidents or somthing..?
ReplyDeletebecause I am huge fan of amything dark and raw..and this poem was Just about that...!
Nice blend of words..and nice ...umm..word play..! ( i wanted to say movie..but this is a write up for gods sakes. Even the word 'word-sequence ' didnt sound appropriate for this beautiful poem..)
keep it all the way up..may be in the stars..:-P
@ bhargav
ReplyDelete5 stars??
gee thanx
@ gulshan
ReplyDeletei understand
@ maverick
ReplyDeletelols...mood swings wil be the end of me one day
@ arun
ReplyDeleteyou actually liked it??
gosh i just wrote it in anger
@ rashmi
ReplyDeletebingo gal...
sumthn did inspire me to write ths
each line left me with a :( dude..somehow cud relate 2 each stanza especially tis...
ReplyDelete"I can't live if you are gone
But if you are gone then you have won
I can't hold you back
In this city, i sleep alone tonight
With your dreams i have to fight
My life's been painted black"..
@●๋•guℓѕнαn●๋•™ , saw some reality in u'r lines :(
ReplyDeletei kno bro
ReplyDeletefeels the same to me
nice yaar..!!!
ReplyDeletejst hv chk on ur moods swings.!!!..dy r actually not them...may b smthng else tht made u write dis...neways
its was vry good..!!!xcellnt
*sigh*
ReplyDeletei kno its true
Did u notice one thing.. jab bhi yeh mood swings hote hai tab hi kuch acha likhne ko miltha hai ! :D hope you come out of ur mood swings soon !!!
ReplyDeletelols thoorz
ReplyDeletemera toh sadiyo baad ho raha hai
Chaliya write :) As RT said one of your best write !!
ReplyDeletevery nicely written..!!! keep penning dear...!!!
ReplyDeletedefinitely ur best .. but made me a bit sad too ... cheer up soon my miththu :)
ReplyDelete@hashan
ReplyDeletethanx da
@yamini
ReplyDeletehey girl...thank yu
@ PS
ReplyDeleteit wil be ok