tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post4969863775993268546..comments2023-11-03T18:40:49.451+05:30Comments on The Writers Lounge: Do I know you?Sandeep Balanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09497006740037526922noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-89839216213338230122008-12-13T04:09:00.000+05:302008-12-13T04:09:00.000+05:30And no .. I DISAGREE with Arjun and Rashi ... A st...And no .. I DISAGREE with Arjun and Rashi ... A story is told as it should be - if the paragraphs are needed, they will be there ... here, there was no need ...<BR/><BR/>And yes, one thing I stretch on ... little less of rain in it Alisha, dont you think so??Tanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07613642883793373191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-91532083131888036012008-12-13T04:06:00.000+05:302008-12-13T04:06:00.000+05:30Hi AlishaThe lady did a mistake and she came back ...Hi Alisha<BR/><BR/>The lady did a mistake and she came back to admit it - such courage! She should have been forgiven, but for the hursh author, she was not ... she died with the guilt in her ... and you let her to die so ... I hoped you would have forgiven her ... <BR/><BR/>Coming back to the contest: 400 words dear!!<BR/><BR/>Somebody told me that I do not count words while writing - I admit - but while writing an essay in the Exam, I have to and I do keep a track on the same ... I just talk about rules and you like it or not, the first rule is the word limit of 400 ... :(Tanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07613642883793373191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-44183727781524061372008-12-12T20:30:00.000+05:302008-12-12T20:30:00.000+05:30I agree with Arjun (Arkun, maybe??0 break it into ...I agree with Arjun (Arkun, maybe??0 break it into paragraphs... <BR/><BR/>But sometimes following your dreams comes at a price. It is like choosing between the devil and deep blue sea and neither of the choice will be perfect. We will regret both!<BR/><BR/>But the moment she said Mom, I was so touched but then.... :( Anyway life doesnt give you everything, does it ?<BR/><BR/>Great read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-62661382446875756352008-12-12T19:42:00.000+05:302008-12-12T19:42:00.000+05:30Story was kind of touching..Especially when the gi...Story was kind of touching..<BR/>Especially when the girl says - "I'm Mr.Burn's daughter...."<BR/>Very touchy...<BR/><BR/>nd Mr.Burns... nice name ;)<BR/><BR/>And one small suggestion- If u can break it up into paragraphs it would be less straining for a reader... :)<BR/><BR/>Cheers..!!<BR/>Arjun .. oops.. 'Arkun' ;)Arjunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03971404663142225199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-11852398822288311172008-12-12T19:23:00.000+05:302008-12-12T19:23:00.000+05:30woho! really really chilly!I almost had tears in m...woho! really really chilly!<BR/><BR/>I almost had tears in my eyes when i read 'mom', for once i thought she's calling her Mom...<BR/><BR/>very nice attempt. i liked the couple of lines: Afterall you don't get everything and chocolate bar.. can never be a compensation of the time :)<BR/><BR/>but re-look here:<BR/><BR/>It is one such rainy day again, and my daughter doesn't know know I am. Some, "Mrs.Gunther".<BR/><BR/>some typo i believe?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-3819662235561491512008-12-12T15:37:00.000+05:302008-12-12T15:37:00.000+05:30i really think some lines can be cut .. it will he...i really think some lines can be cut .. it will help the word count too ... on the whole a nice story .. liked few bits of the story too much .. like talk of irony of life , and the feelings are well expressed .. good one :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878684769651514469.post-72681481681353631712008-12-12T15:28:00.000+05:302008-12-12T15:28:00.000+05:30hey girl as per the rule the word count shud be 40...hey girl as per the rule <BR/>the word count shud be 400<BR/><BR/>and urs is 688<BR/><BR/>y dont u make it upto 400 <BR/>its the constraint yaar<BR/>coz every 1 has followed that thing<BR/><BR/>so ur requested to do the sameThe Solitary Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15512100204698797001noreply@blogger.com